Talk:The Legend of Korra/GA1

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Reviewer: Obtund (talk · contribs) 18:24, 16 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]

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Rate Attribute Review Comment
1. Well-written:
1a. the prose is clear, concise, and understandable to an appropriately broad audience; spelling and grammar are correct.
  1. "…the series is set in a fictional world where some people can "bend", that is…" "can" should be "are able to."  Done
  2. "…an anti-bender revolutionary group, the "Equalists"." should say that they are "called the Equalists."  Done
  3. "Several producers and voice actors from the original series, including designer Joaquim Dos Santos and composer Jeremy Zuckerman, also worked on The Legend of Korra." makes it seem as if The Legend of Korra was the predecessor. That needs to be fixed.  Done
  4. It says, "Bending is carried out using spiritual and physical exercises, portrayed in the series as similar to Chinese and other Asian martial arts." it should be "Bending is carried out using spiritual and physical exercises, which are portrayed in the series as similar to Chinese and other Asian martial arts."  Done
  5. "Tenzin, Lin, and Korra's friends eventually discover Tarrlok is lying…" should be "…eventually discover that Tarrlok is lying…"  Done
  6. "…Tarrlok and Amon are both sons of the bloodbending gangster boss Yakone…" use something else besides "gangster boss."  Done
  7. The cast and characters section needs a lead in to the section.  Done
  8. "Asami Sato, the only non-bender main character..." should be written as "Asami Sato, the only main character who is a non-bender..."  Done
  9. "Other main characters in the series are Korra's airbender teacher Tenzin..." should be "airbending"  Done
  10. "Their father is Yakone, a mobster..." use a different word besides mobster.  Done
  11. "Tarrlok, who is voiced by Dee Bradley Baker..." should be "who is also voiced by..." since you clarify in the previous paragraph that Baker is the voice of Naga and Pabu.  Done
  12. "He is an ambitious and charismatic politician who resorts..." should have a in front of charismatic.
  13. "Elements of the first book that received particular praise were the exceptional quality of the animation..." should be was not were.
  14. "...as well as the series's..." should be series'.  Done
1b. it complies with the Manual of Style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation.
2. Verifiable with no original research:
2a. it contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline.
2b. reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose).
2c. it contains no original research.
3. Broad in its coverage:
3a. it addresses the main aspects of the topic.
  1. The plot subsection skips the beginning of the story when Korra disobeys Tenzin and goes into Republic City.  Done
3b. it stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style).
  1. The ratings subsection is unneeded and is only needed on the The Legend of Korra (Book 1) page.  Done - Some info was added back by Sandstein
4. Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each.
5. Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute.
RFCs in place. Not notable and will not make this article unstable.
6. Illustrated, if possible, by media such as images, video, or audio:
6a. media are tagged with their copyright statuses, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content.
6b. media are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions.
7. Overall assessment.

Discussion[edit]

Please refer to issue by numbers. Eg., the second issue with 1a criterion is 1a2.

I disagree with the assessment at 3b that the ratings subsection is unneeded. Ratings are an important aspect of a TV show and belong into the main article. I've reinserted the respective section, if not the graphic. I also don't think that the summary coverage of the book 1 plot needs to go into any more detail, as is suggested for 3a.  Sandstein  21:09, 22 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]
As regards 5, there are unclosed RfCs on the talk page regarding article organization.  Sandstein  21:10, 22 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]
I'm ambivalent about the ratings section, so whatever you guys decide. But for the RFCs, the episode list doesn't concern this article and the italics RFC is pretty much closed (the only editor opposing italics is Light2Shadow). Only major pending change in the article is possible reversion of the characters section, which I do not see happening unless somebody comes up with an out-of-universe character list (not the previous crap that was in the article). Finally, as for the other changes (prose, etc.), I'll work on that ASAP. — Parent5446 ☯ (msg email) 23:43, 22 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]
What you did about 3b is fine. 3a is missing vital information on how the show starts. That needs to be there. If the RFCs are not taken care of, the article may be defined as unstable so get them done ASAP. ObtundTalk 01:30, 23 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]
I'm going to work on 3a later today (shouldn't be more than a sentence or two). — Parent5446 ☯ (msg email) 15:59, 24 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Yeah, just say something like tenzin came to the southern water tribe and left and then korra snuck on a boat and went to republic city, and then see meet Beifong. ObtundTalk 19:21, 24 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]
OK, added that and also added the brief intro to the characters section. Hopefully things are OK now. — Parent5446 ☯ (msg email) 03:23, 27 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Fixed a number of the prose issues. I didn't fix 4, 12, and 13 because they are correct in their current form (expln: would create a fragmented verb clause; both ambitious and charismatic are adj. of politician, and so the article belongs to the entire phrase; the noun of the sentence is "elements", which is plural). Still have to work on 7. — Parent5446 ☯ (msg email) 00:02, 23 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]

4. It says, "Bending is carried out using spiritual and physical exercises, portrayed in the series as similar to Chinese and other Asian martial arts." it should be "Bending is carried out using spiritual and physical exercises, which are portrayed in the series as similar to Chinese and other Asian martial arts." This is my error as I wrote my comment incorrectly. I have updated the above to comply. ObtundTalk 01:36, 23 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Ah, OK. Just fixed in the article. — Parent5446 ☯ (msg email) 15:59, 24 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Comment:The insertion of "which are" is not wrong, but, Obtund, it is not necessary. It was a perfectly correct participial phrase. --Stfg (talk) 08:12, 27 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]
12.  Agreed - ObtundTalk 01:40, 23 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]
13.  Agreed - My error. ObtundTalk 02:53, 23 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Did you ever forget to fail the article when the 3-day time limit's up? 71.142.234.34 (talk) 23:20, 24 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]

No I did not, the edits were being taken care of, and there were some issues to be discussed. ObtundTalk 23:37, 24 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]
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